Haemon: I see today that my father has encumbered yet another issue
But one of his own doing, my poor father of proud tongue.
To the grave, I shall love him still, but as for his stubbornness
May it be damned! He chooses to ignore the error of his
Ways should his subjects see him weak, but it is his
Obstinacy which shall break the walls of Thebes.
For certainty, I am less fearful of the invader's blade than of
My Father's piercing edicts. But he shall not be persuaded
By equally inflammatory words and I must first appeal to
Him as the humble servant that I am. "I am your son, sir," I
Shall say, and "by your wise decisions my life is ruled, and
Them I shall always obey. I cannot value any marriage-tie
Above your own good guidance" (143). Perhaps my kindly
Approach will be accepted with good favor, and he will be
More inclined to consider the modest council of one who is
Of lesser stature. I recognize that my dearly betrothed has
Sparked his poor temper, so wisdom shall guide my talk of
Her and the blessing of Athena will ease my words should
His stubbornness prevail.
In this day of bloodshed, it is Reason who shall have
Her victory, and should my father not take her side, I
Cannot leave without speaking truthfully and openly. If my
Kind words fail, Reason shall be my blade of choice. First,
I will parry by adding, "Father, there is nothing I can prize
Above your happiness and well-being. What greater good
Could a son desire," but my lunge shall be "surely, to think
Your own the only wisdom, and yours the only word, the
Only will, betrays a shallow spirit, an empty heart" (145).
Truly will my sword pierce his heart of logic or it shall sever
Our bond forever. For between the glory of Olympus and
The fate that lies in Hades, no crueler punishment is that than
To live under the shadow of ignorance. My wife, may the
Fates will her soul to the Isles of the Bless'd should her cord
Be severed from this world forever, she buries her brother
With honour, and I shall renounce her never. Who profits
From my father's pigheadedness and who shall be the
Citizen of his heart? War and betrayal have blinded him to
The needs of the individual, and the laws which govern all
The Heavens have been lost in his quest for glory. Ha! He'd
Be an excellent king on a desert island! (146) Perhaps if no
More can be said, this shall be my only pleasure in what
Might be our last exchange. For I cannot go on living in a
State void of morality and cursed by the gods. Should I find
My betrothed on her deathbed, it shall be mine too, and
We shall wonder through the mysterious fields of eternity
Forever. But one last opportunity will my father have to
Change his ways - I concede nothing else. Reason or Death!
Darn it Keaton. Just when I thought my blog was looking good, you come in with a spotless blog like this. This is easily my favorite blog out of the bunch due to the flawless execution, the believable characterization of Haemon, and the preciseness of following the prompt. The writing style is parallel to Sophocles and really captures the essence of the times well. I'm not sure how long this took you to write, but it is brilliantly worded and at the same time sounds exactly like something Haemon would say. Your incorporation of quotes helps solidify the commentary well, and I applaud you for that. Also, you managed to capture the internal conflict within Haemon in a way that makes it believable. You probably could write some made up play and pass it off as Greek mythology without anyone ever realizing otherwise. Kudos to you Keaton.
ReplyDeleteOh my gosh. Can you stop making the rest of us look like fools?? This is so amazing; you're ability to adopt tone and style of writing is uncanny. I really did feel like I was still reading the Sophocles' words!! It was a great idea writing in the same format as the play. As always, great content, deep thinking, and eloquent execution. Ugh, even your integration of quotes and references to other Greek mythology characters (such as the Fates) was perfect. Haha and I agree with everything Jonathan had to say. Bien hecho.
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ReplyDeleteAwesome Keaton! Loved the fact that you wrote this in verse. :) I don't think you kept yourself to a syllable count (did you?) but you still were able to effectively use the line breaks to draw attention to important words. Some really eloquent lines from you-- loved "it is his / Obstinancy which shall break the walls of Thebes." I also loved your figurative language in elevating Reason-- personifying her first as a she, and then employing the extended metaphor of using Reason as a blade to parry and lunge with Creon. Very cool!
ReplyDeleteIn terms of exploring Haemon's motivations, I would say you portray him to be strongly principled (like Antigone!), angry with Creon but ready to approach him strategically, and grounded in reason. Love thinking of Haemon and Antigone wandering the mysterious fields of eternity forever. Excellent work from you!
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